BOW BEFORE ME.

[agilebrit]

For I am the Queen of the Drabbles.

Well. Drabbles-and-a-half, anyway. Try this on for size:

My company sends me all over, hunting things that go bump in the night. This job at Lake Tele in the Congo had been simple, for once. I knelt by the lakeshore, washing purple goo off before it stained, when a gigantic ripple surged over my forearms.

I jerked my head up...and up. And up. Holy--

That...was a dinosaur. An Apatosaurus, to be exact. The snakelike head dipped, and it sniffed me. Once. Twice. I'd stupidly left my weapons in the tent; if it decided I was food, I couldn't do a blessed thing. But I swear it winked, and it seemed amused as it backed away and sank.

In our business, we believe in twelve impossible things before breakfast. Vampires, alternate dimensions, and ghosts are part of our routine. However, as the Apatosaurus disappeared beneath the water, I knew that none of my coworkers would ever believe this.

Because, really. The Xander-meets-a-dinosaur story was way too good to leave languishing as fanfic.

Comments

[texanfan.livejournal.com]

I like this one better than the Lindsey drabble. I bet you could trim the word count enough to get it in 8 point too.

[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

According to WP, it's 8.5 in Arial Narrow, and the Hubby assures me it's readable. That story also got the Spontaneous Hubby Laugh-Snort of Approval. :)

[naol.livejournal.com]

Ooh! I dig this :)

[mermaidrain.livejournal.com]

What's the word count on this?

I think I like this much better than the other one because it's more of a hook. It grabs you and makes you WANT to find out more about the character, the setting, the story, etc.

The other one is more of a wrap up of a story that's already occurred. While it's good and the concept and character are good, all the action occurs off screen and it's a bit anti-climatic.

This one jumps the reader right into the fray. Good job!

[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

Word count is 150. :)