Day seven: Happiness is...

Wandering over to Yuletide and finding seventeen Kiss Kiss Bang Bang fics. Not only that, but most of them are awesome and in character and just lovely.

AND.

OMG. Best Christmas present ever, y'all, fic-wise, anyway: Suburban Decay -- ZOMBIE APOCALYPSE IN THE KKBB 'VERSE. MY CAPSLOCK IS NOT ENOUGH FOR THE SHEER AWESOMENESS OF THIS FIC AND YOU NEED TO GO READ IT RIGHT NOW.

In other news, we got at least a foot of snow last night. I was going to go grocery shopping today. Yeah, RIGHT. The plow hasn't even hit our little cul-de-sac yet. I can't shovel because of my back, and the Hubby isn't home.

This is...not good. I'm seriously thinking about making the Hubby get us a snowblower because this is the second year in a row it's snowed like this and not having one with a driveway the size of ours is frakking ridiculous.

Day seven: Happiness is...

Wandering over to Yuletide and finding seventeen Kiss Kiss Bang Bang fics. Not only that, but most of them are awesome and in character and just lovely.

AND.

OMG. Best Christmas present ever, y'all, fic-wise, anyway: Suburban Decay -- ZOMBIE APOCALYPSE IN THE KKBB 'VERSE. MY CAPSLOCK IS NOT ENOUGH FOR THE SHEER AWESOMENESS OF THIS FIC AND YOU NEED TO GO READ IT RIGHT NOW.

In other news, we got at least a foot of snow last night. I was going to go grocery shopping today. Yeah, RIGHT. The plow hasn't even hit our little cul-de-sac yet. I can't shovel because of my back, and the Hubby isn't home.

This is...not good. I'm seriously thinking about making the Hubby get us a snowblower because this is the second year in a row it's snowed like this and not having one with a driveway the size of ours is frakking ridiculous.

*ponders*

Not!Perry morphed from Camryn Manheim to Queen Latifah, in my head.

How did that happen?

This isn't a bad thing. Because, seriously, I shouldn't just default to "white" for my characters. This will require a slight adjustment in my description of not!Harmony, but I'm not really seeing a whole lot of other changes.

*ponders*

Not!Perry morphed from Camryn Manheim to Queen Latifah, in my head.

How did that happen?

This isn't a bad thing. Because, seriously, I shouldn't just default to "white" for my characters. This will require a slight adjustment in my description of not!Harmony, but I'm not really seeing a whole lot of other changes.

AUGH.

I just realized, looking this thing over for the umpteenth time, that in the first eighteen pages (thirty-six or so if this was standard MS format, which it so isn't right now because I hates writing in it, I does), I only have two scenes from not!Harry's POV.

In his first one (the very first scene), he's getting the shit beat out of him by the bad guys. And he passes out. Understandably, because he's just, you know, gotten the shit beat out of him.

In his next scene, eighteen pages later, he's shooting the bad guys dead. On autopilot. And he gets shot in the chest. And...passes out again. Understandably, because he's just been, you know, shot in the chest.

In between there, he gets a little computer work done, snarks at not!Tony that he can't imagine working for him, and is puzzled by a reference to lupus and bats in one of the memos he uncovers. These scenes are from other characters' viewpoints.

There's nothing in there about how very screwed up he is, or about how he's broken and not!Harmony is there to pick up his pieces when he falls apart, or about how he's been getting better.

So. In a story that's All About not!Harry...it needs to be more All About not!Harry.

*facepalms*

AUGH.

I just realized, looking this thing over for the umpteenth time, that in the first eighteen pages (thirty-six or so if this was standard MS format, which it so isn't right now because I hates writing in it, I does), I only have two scenes from not!Harry's POV.

In his first one (the very first scene), he's getting the shit beat out of him by the bad guys. And he passes out. Understandably, because he's just, you know, gotten the shit beat out of him.

In his next scene, eighteen pages later, he's shooting the bad guys dead. On autopilot. And he gets shot in the chest. And...passes out again. Understandably, because he's just been, you know, shot in the chest.

In between there, he gets a little computer work done, snarks at not!Tony that he can't imagine working for him, and is puzzled by a reference to lupus and bats in one of the memos he uncovers. These scenes are from other characters' viewpoints.

There's nothing in there about how very screwed up he is, or about how he's broken and not!Harmony is there to pick up his pieces when he falls apart, or about how he's been getting better.

So. In a story that's All About not!Harry...it needs to be more All About not!Harry.

*facepalms*

Okay.

I've managed to set up not!Harry's fragility a whole lot better, without having to resort to adding an extra scene. Not!Harmony is a great viewpoint character for this, because she's lived with him for eighteen months and can compare and contrast how he was before the bad guys took him to how he is now. Poor fellow. So I've added some to this scene, so he proves that he's a hell of a lot more self-aware than you might think at first blush, and that, yeah, he's physically okay (as far as he knows *evil laughter*) but his psyche is going to take a lot longer to recover.

If it ever does.

Okay.

I've managed to set up not!Harry's fragility a whole lot better, without having to resort to adding an extra scene. Not!Harmony is a great viewpoint character for this, because she's lived with him for eighteen months and can compare and contrast how he was before the bad guys took him to how he is now. Poor fellow. So I've added some to this scene, so he proves that he's a hell of a lot more self-aware than you might think at first blush, and that, yeah, he's physically okay (as far as he knows *evil laughter*) but his psyche is going to take a lot longer to recover.

If it ever does.