Gaaaaaaaaaaah.

[agilebrit]

I gave the new!improved Zombies! story to my Writing Buddy and the New Guy to tear into last weekend. New Guy pointed out that my timeline is shaky (why doesn't he just amputate her leg, since they're right there at the hospital, to prevent her becoming a zombie, since he's a medical examiner and all?), so I fixed that. And I don't describe people very well (at all), but honestly, I'm not sure I need to in this case.

My Writing Buddy wanted More. More at the end, and More of Billy Joe trying to talk my protag out of killing him. I fixed the end by moving some wording around in the last few paragraphs and breaking the 'graphs differently. It's way better now.

The thing with Billy Joe... I'm not actually sure what to do there. Perhaps I'll think about it in the shower.

SocloseIcantasteit.

Oh, and I have a title, because my Writing Buddy is awesome.

Comments

[texanfan.livejournal.com]

For what it's worth I agree on the Billy Joe talking more to talk him out of it. I'm ashamed to say I didn't even think of the amputation thing.

[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

Hey, neither did I, or my Writing Buddy, or anyone else who gave me feedback.

And I have now twisted the knife even more. Mine is an evil laugh. My id, let me show you it.

I am not a nice person.