Snippet Saturday!

[agilebrit]

Ben's been rescued. He doesn't believe it. And, go:

"Shh. You're safe now. Really."

"Cage. Demon. Syringe. Pain."

She could do something about the needle, and she got up and grabbed it. "Ben. Watch." Janni threw it outside the cell, hard, when he looked up. "Okay? I'm not going to inject you with anything. Everyone was worried about you, that was just a precaution. We've got you in here because you jumped out a window into the ocean the first time you woke up."

"That's because this isn't...fuck, obviously it's real, for a certain value of real. I just--I can't. I was supposed to die. It was supposed to be over. And now--"

"It is over. You're out, and you're safe, and you're coming home with me to Los Angeles." She went back to stroking her fingers up and down his arm, scooting closer to him, and he didn't cringe away. "Come here, sweetie. Come on." He slid down the wall onto his side, until his head rested on her leg, and she said, "Smell me, Ben. Your eyes might lie to you, but your nose never has."

"Nose is broken. Friggin' wolfsbane. I'm so tired." He wasn't tired enough to relax; although he'd closed his eyes, he was still stiff as a board, and shaking. "I miss Ange. Always knew exactly where I stood with her." He sighed. "I know I'm not going to get to see Janni ever again, because I so don't deserve that, and she wouldn't want me back anyway. But if I'm really good, could you send me back to Ange? Would that be too much?"

In other news, Cujo died in the night, which...wasn't surprising, all things considered. But, woe. Yes, I know how odd that is.

Comments

[flynn-boyant.livejournal.com]

Oh, poor Cujo!
It's really not surprising, no, but it's hard not to get attached to anything you take care of (even if it's only for a short time).

I'm not sure I've commented on these writing posts much and for that I am remiss because I do enjoy them so very much!

[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

Yeah, Cujo was bouncing around the cage last night, and he ate and drank, too. I thought he was going to make it, but... *sigh*

And thank you! I always wonder if anyone is actually reading these things. Someday I'll get around to posting something besides "this is the part where I'm mean to Ben some more."

Sometime.

[texanfan.livejournal.com]

I realize I haven't been commenting on your snippets but I really think I'm going to need to see the whole thing in context to do a good critique.

I'm kinda both sad and relieved about Cujo.

[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

I'm not really after a critique on these, I'm really more just teasing you guys. Unless you find something really egregious, in which case let me have it. LOL

I feel the same way about Cujo. We gave the little guy a chance, and now I don't have to feel bad.

[garnigal.livejournal.com]

Poor Janni. He's so broken, and she knows that, but it's still gotta hurt that he's asking for another woman.

[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

I'm horrible for writing that, I know. Shows just how far down the rabbit hole he's fallen.