Poking the novelthing...
Oct. 6th, 2009 09:47 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
agilebritAs I do. And I decided to look something up in the first book to see if I could use it to hook them together a bit.
Turns out I couldn't, but I read over the climax and found it needed fixing, desperately, because of a characterization thing I didn't actually notice until I started this one and pushed Ben to the breaking point throughout instead of just at stated times.
Ben talks (and thinks) in fragments when he's really stressed. He tends to get ultra-choppy with the sentences when he's fallen off the end of his rope. And thus, the climax part where he's out in the scrub with an M4 under his chin needed a hack job.
Which I have accomplished.
Now I need to go in and finish this other scene...
ARGH.
Turns out I couldn't, but I read over the climax and found it needed fixing, desperately, because of a characterization thing I didn't actually notice until I started this one and pushed Ben to the breaking point throughout instead of just at stated times.
Ben talks (and thinks) in fragments when he's really stressed. He tends to get ultra-choppy with the sentences when he's fallen off the end of his rope. And thus, the climax part where he's out in the scrub with an M4 under his chin needed a hack job.
Which I have accomplished.
Now I need to go in and finish this other scene...
ARGH.
