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Well. I poked the Ghost Ship thing again this morning.
It's more broken than I thought it was when I read it over yesterday.
A major part of the problem is the climax. Or the ending. Whatever. It doesn't sizzle. It fizzles. It feels rushed, and there's not enough there there.
*twistymouth* And I'm not sure how I fix that in the context of the story.
It also needs more. More ghosts, more of the stowaway. Or maybe I should take the stowaway out.
It needs a twist. Or something. I think.
It's more broken than I thought it was when I read it over yesterday.
A major part of the problem is the climax. Or the ending. Whatever. It doesn't sizzle. It fizzles. It feels rushed, and there's not enough there there.
*twistymouth* And I'm not sure how I fix that in the context of the story.
It also needs more. More ghosts, more of the stowaway. Or maybe I should take the stowaway out.
It needs a twist. Or something. I think.
