Mmph.

Well. I poked the Ghost Ship thing again this morning.

It's more broken than I thought it was when I read it over yesterday.

A major part of the problem is the climax. Or the ending. Whatever. It doesn't sizzle. It fizzles. It feels rushed, and there's not enough there there.

*twistymouth* And I'm not sure how I fix that in the context of the story.

It also needs more. More ghosts, more of the stowaway. Or maybe I should take the stowaway out.

It needs a twist. Or something. I think.