agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
I've cracked 27,000 words. I have a rudimentary plot. Thanks to a Word War with the lovely and effulgent [livejournal.com profile] sunnyd_lite, I've done my 250 words today, and did over 1300 yesterday. Yay. Thus, I bring you a snippet.

So. Ben has awakened from (yet another) nightmare, and Angeline has given him a backrub. And...go:

Ten minutes later, he was blissed out and half asleep. He barely noticed when she trailed a series of kisses up his spine, from his waist to his neck. She rolled him over gently to his back and snuggled into his side.

He wrapped an arm around her automatically. "You're cuddly today," he murmured.

She kissed his pec, running her hands across his chest, working her lips up to his throat. "Want more than cuddles," she breathed against his neck.

"Married man, Ange."

"You're not getting out of here. You're never going to see her again. You're an immortal werewolf." She walked her fingers down his thigh. "A lifetime that long is too bloody long to be celibate."

He caught her hand before it went anywhere too personal. "I've been here less than a month. I'll cope for now."

"Your misplaced sense of loyalty is going to get us in trouble. They know me, and they all expect--"

"We'll deal with that when it happens." He moved her down to pillow her head on his shoulder, gently but firmly, and squeezed her. "This was nice. Don't spoil a good thing."

She gave a little growl and pricked him with her nails, but if she'd meant it, she'd have drawn blood. "You're trying my patience, choirboy." Moving his chin with her finger and making him look at her, she asked him seriously, "Will you be able to sleep now?"

He smiled lazily with one side of his mouth, but it never reached his eyes. "Think so. Thanks, Ange."

"Well, you know," she mumbled. "One of us has to stay sane."

Monday!

May. 11th, 2009 10:25 am
agilebrit: (Over My Head)
And thus...

the WEEKLY WORD COUNT. /reverb

Last week's word count: 12,072
This week's word count: 23,292
Word count for the week: 11,220

I don't think they're going to be pouring out in quite this profusion anymore. I'm getting to the point where Plot is actually going to have to start coming into play, and I'm still not sure exactly what that is.

But I do know that I'm going to have to start dealing with the dubcon issues, the Stockholm Syndrome issues, and Ben's massive guilt. Not to mention the fact that he's just about back at Square One with the panic attacks.

Boy, is Janni going to be pissed. Not at him, but when she meets Angeline, it's going to be epic.

ETA: Tiny snippet in the comments, if anyone cares.

Monday!

May. 11th, 2009 10:25 am
agilebrit: (Over My Head)
And thus...

the WEEKLY WORD COUNT. /reverb

Last week's word count: 12,072
This week's word count: 23,292
Word count for the week: 11,220

I don't think they're going to be pouring out in quite this profusion anymore. I'm getting to the point where Plot is actually going to have to start coming into play, and I'm still not sure exactly what that is.

But I do know that I'm going to have to start dealing with the dubcon issues, the Stockholm Syndrome issues, and Ben's massive guilt. Not to mention the fact that he's just about back at Square One with the panic attacks.

Boy, is Janni going to be pissed. Not at him, but when she meets Angeline, it's going to be epic.

ETA: Tiny snippet in the comments, if anyone cares.
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
When last we left our intrepid hero, he was strapped to a table with needles in his arms, being taunted by a lady vampire and saying "Don't touch me." Well, she's gotten him off the table, they've had a "training session," and one of his (myriad) buttons got pushed when she took him to the bar.

And, go:

She unlocked the door and he collapsed inward. "In more, Ben, I can't shut it." He scooted. "That's it, good boy." The deadbolt clicked home and she knelt beside him. "Easy. You're all right."

"Really not. Fuck." She reached for his shoulder. He got as far as the first word in "Don't touch me" before a series of facts crashed onto his head.

Janni wasn't here. (Thank god.)

He would probably never see her again, because getting out looked nigh impossible.

He'd been without human contact for too damn long. Angeline wasn't human, but then, neither was he, strictly. When he and Janni were in a room together, they were always touching, maybe no more than a hand on a leg or a lap as a foot pillow, but he missed that. So. Very. Much. So much it physically hurt sometimes.

Angeline had removed the collar and the wrist cuffs. She was murmuring to him, the same words over and over. Her hands weren't anywhere near him. "You'll be okay, Benji. Shh. I've got you. Breathe. You're safe in here."

The knot in his chest tightened. Despair crushed him. She wasn't, he couldn't--

He had to.

He let out a long, shuddering sigh, moved, and laid his head on Angeline's leg. She froze, and he was almost afraid she'd dump him off and leave him truly alone. "Ben?"

"Please."

"I don't...'please,' what?"

He could barely form words. "Please."

The backs of her fingers stroked his arm. "This?"

He closed his eyes. He could breathe again. "Yes."

"I can touch you now." It wasn't quite a question.

"Yes."


And thus the Breaking Down of Ben, Bit by Bit, continues.
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
When last we left our intrepid hero, he was strapped to a table with needles in his arms, being taunted by a lady vampire and saying "Don't touch me." Well, she's gotten him off the table, they've had a "training session," and one of his (myriad) buttons got pushed when she took him to the bar.

And, go:

She unlocked the door and he collapsed inward. "In more, Ben, I can't shut it." He scooted. "That's it, good boy." The deadbolt clicked home and she knelt beside him. "Easy. You're all right."

"Really not. Fuck." She reached for his shoulder. He got as far as the first word in "Don't touch me" before a series of facts crashed onto his head.

Janni wasn't here. (Thank god.)

He would probably never see her again, because getting out looked nigh impossible.

He'd been without human contact for too damn long. Angeline wasn't human, but then, neither was he, strictly. When he and Janni were in a room together, they were always touching, maybe no more than a hand on a leg or a lap as a foot pillow, but he missed that. So. Very. Much. So much it physically hurt sometimes.

Angeline had removed the collar and the wrist cuffs. She was murmuring to him, the same words over and over. Her hands weren't anywhere near him. "You'll be okay, Benji. Shh. I've got you. Breathe. You're safe in here."

The knot in his chest tightened. Despair crushed him. She wasn't, he couldn't--

He had to.

He let out a long, shuddering sigh, moved, and laid his head on Angeline's leg. She froze, and he was almost afraid she'd dump him off and leave him truly alone. "Ben?"

"Please."

"I don't...'please,' what?"

He could barely form words. "Please."

The backs of her fingers stroked his arm. "This?"

He closed his eyes. He could breathe again. "Yes."

"I can touch you now." It wasn't quite a question.

"Yes."


And thus the Breaking Down of Ben, Bit by Bit, continues.
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
I'm having hell of a time deciding which snippet to post. So...have, er, this one!

To set the scene, Ben is strapped to a table by twelve points, needles in both arms, wrapped in a wolfsbane net that is growing roots into him and dumping painful (to put it mildly) toxins into his system.

Ben...

That was Janni's voice. Soft hands in his hair, soft lips on his. Oh, god, was she here? Had to get her out. Couldn't move, not even to open his eyes. Should warn her, then, but couldn't talk either.

He sensed her being ripped away from him, heard her shriek cut off in mid-cry, smelled her blood, felt its warm spray across his face and chest.

Wrenched awake.

Angeline stood beside him with a hand on his cheek. "That looked like a bad one," she said.

"Don't touch me...and get out of my head," Ben rasped, without opening his eyes.

"Oh, I'm not in your head, dear puppy, not yet. But I know a vivid nightmare when I see it." She removed the hand. "I can take them away."

"Can you take...yourself away? Let me die in peace."

"You don't have any peace. You're in ghastly pain, you're having nightmares and panic attacks, and that wolfsbane isn't going to kill you gently." Her nails stroked the inside of his forearm. "I'm willing to help you with all that, but you have to give me something in return."

"I'll give you the finger." He did so. Weakly.

She exhaled against his throat. "See, Benji, this is why I like you. Even in a situation like this, you're spunky." Her canine nicked him under the ear, and her tongue flicked out and licked away the blood that welled up. "I could just take what I want, you know. The fact that I'm asking is something of an honor."

"Honor among vampires." He almost laughed, but it turned into a cough. "That's new." Memories of Idna, who hadn't asked. "Have I mentioned that I hate vampires? And that you're not helping? Because I do, and you're not."
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
I'm having hell of a time deciding which snippet to post. So...have, er, this one!

To set the scene, Ben is strapped to a table by twelve points, needles in both arms, wrapped in a wolfsbane net that is growing roots into him and dumping painful (to put it mildly) toxins into his system.

Ben...

That was Janni's voice. Soft hands in his hair, soft lips on his. Oh, god, was she here? Had to get her out. Couldn't move, not even to open his eyes. Should warn her, then, but couldn't talk either.

He sensed her being ripped away from him, heard her shriek cut off in mid-cry, smelled her blood, felt its warm spray across his face and chest.

Wrenched awake.

Angeline stood beside him with a hand on his cheek. "That looked like a bad one," she said.

"Don't touch me...and get out of my head," Ben rasped, without opening his eyes.

"Oh, I'm not in your head, dear puppy, not yet. But I know a vivid nightmare when I see it." She removed the hand. "I can take them away."

"Can you take...yourself away? Let me die in peace."

"You don't have any peace. You're in ghastly pain, you're having nightmares and panic attacks, and that wolfsbane isn't going to kill you gently." Her nails stroked the inside of his forearm. "I'm willing to help you with all that, but you have to give me something in return."

"I'll give you the finger." He did so. Weakly.

She exhaled against his throat. "See, Benji, this is why I like you. Even in a situation like this, you're spunky." Her canine nicked him under the ear, and her tongue flicked out and licked away the blood that welled up. "I could just take what I want, you know. The fact that I'm asking is something of an honor."

"Honor among vampires." He almost laughed, but it turned into a cough. "That's new." Memories of Idna, who hadn't asked. "Have I mentioned that I hate vampires? And that you're not helping? Because I do, and you're not."
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
Except, this is more than a snippet. More like an excerpt. This is an alternate POV scene, the one in which Ben and Janni meet each other again for the first time in five years. It's about 1900 words, Ben's POV, first person.

And...go.

This had been a mistake. )
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
Except, this is more than a snippet. More like an excerpt. This is an alternate POV scene, the one in which Ben and Janni meet each other again for the first time in five years. It's about 1900 words, Ben's POV, first person.

And...go.

This had been a mistake. )
agilebrit: (Over My Head)
At the lovely and effulgent [livejournal.com profile] difrancis's LJ.

Here's mine, which is a piece from something I'm going to throw up as a DVD extra for the not!kkbb/im novelthing, one of these days. No, it's not the sex scene. You no can haz.
agilebrit: (Over My Head)
At the lovely and effulgent [livejournal.com profile] difrancis's LJ.

Here's mine, which is a piece from something I'm going to throw up as a DVD extra for the not!kkbb/im novelthing, one of these days. No, it's not the sex scene. You no can haz.
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
So. I'm doing (yet another) editing pass, and I get to the part where the bad guys have not!Harry. Strapped to a table, down three pints of blood. No chance of rescue, like, at all--Sekrit Underground Lair territory. The Head Bad Guy is pissed at him anyway, because not!Harry killed his nephew (with good reason, not that the Head Bad Guy cares about his reasons).

Original line: "You're going to kill me, aren't you?"

This is...a good line. I like it. It gets the job done. However.

New line: "When are you going to kill me?"

Better line. Straighter and much more to the point. There's no "is there any chance I'm going to get out of this alive" here, because, well...there's not. And not!Harry isn't stupid, so he knows this.

I don't just like the new line, I adore the new line. Because way to make the Lady!Doc even more uncomfortable than she already is with the situation.

You know, I'd stop doing editing passes if the thing didn't keep getting better and better every time I did one.

I haven't even put in the Artist!not!Harmony part yet.
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
So. I'm doing (yet another) editing pass, and I get to the part where the bad guys have not!Harry. Strapped to a table, down three pints of blood. No chance of rescue, like, at all--Sekrit Underground Lair territory. The Head Bad Guy is pissed at him anyway, because not!Harry killed his nephew (with good reason, not that the Head Bad Guy cares about his reasons).

Original line: "You're going to kill me, aren't you?"

This is...a good line. I like it. It gets the job done. However.

New line: "When are you going to kill me?"

Better line. Straighter and much more to the point. There's no "is there any chance I'm going to get out of this alive" here, because, well...there's not. And not!Harry isn't stupid, so he knows this.

I don't just like the new line, I adore the new line. Because way to make the Lady!Doc even more uncomfortable than she already is with the situation.

You know, I'd stop doing editing passes if the thing didn't keep getting better and better every time I did one.

I haven't even put in the Artist!not!Harmony part yet.
agilebrit: (KKBB manip Tony/Pepper)
You poor bastard.

You know what? I was going to post a long entry explaining what I'd just done. And then I realized that you haven't been graced with a snippet in awhile. So, here. Have one:

The tall one weighed a cattle prod in one hand and the stun gun in the other, eyeing Ben crossways with an expression that wasn't a smile. "This," he said casually, holding up the stun gun, "puts out about five hundred thousand volts, according to the manufacturer. It knocked you out in the parking lot pretty as you please. However, we don't want to knock you out. Knocking you out is counterproductive."

"I'd prefer it," Ben rasped, spitting blood. His blurred vision had honed in on the cattle prod, which brought back all kinds of memories from Afghanistan. None of them were happy ones.

"Of course you would. Now this--" He hefted the cattle prod. "--only puts out about eleven thousand volts. It's actually one of my most favorite toys, because it's painful as hell but doesn't cause any lasting damage, so I can use it again and again." He paused. "Tell us what we want to know, and I won't use it on you."

Shit. Ben closed his eyes and tried to breathe. He thought about making something up, anything to stop them, but if they didn't believe the truth after all this, then a lie wouldn't convince them either. "I. Don't. Know."

"That's really a shame."


I'm getting to the point where I'm starting to think that this might be actually good.
agilebrit: (KKBB manip Tony/Pepper)
You poor bastard.

You know what? I was going to post a long entry explaining what I'd just done. And then I realized that you haven't been graced with a snippet in awhile. So, here. Have one:

The tall one weighed a cattle prod in one hand and the stun gun in the other, eyeing Ben crossways with an expression that wasn't a smile. "This," he said casually, holding up the stun gun, "puts out about five hundred thousand volts, according to the manufacturer. It knocked you out in the parking lot pretty as you please. However, we don't want to knock you out. Knocking you out is counterproductive."

"I'd prefer it," Ben rasped, spitting blood. His blurred vision had honed in on the cattle prod, which brought back all kinds of memories from Afghanistan. None of them were happy ones.

"Of course you would. Now this--" He hefted the cattle prod. "--only puts out about eleven thousand volts. It's actually one of my most favorite toys, because it's painful as hell but doesn't cause any lasting damage, so I can use it again and again." He paused. "Tell us what we want to know, and I won't use it on you."

Shit. Ben closed his eyes and tried to breathe. He thought about making something up, anything to stop them, but if they didn't believe the truth after all this, then a lie wouldn't convince them either. "I. Don't. Know."

"That's really a shame."


I'm getting to the point where I'm starting to think that this might be actually good.
agilebrit: (KKBB manip Tony/Pepper)
Stolen from damn near everyone on my flist. Post one line from each of your WIPs. No context, no explanations. No more than one sentence!

Here we go...

"All I'm saying is that Mary getting turned into a cow is too fantastic for words, and you, my friend, are very very drunk."

NB: Oh, God, I love this story, why am I not working on it RIGHT NOW???

The voice sounded like a chipmunk would if it inhaled helium and spoke English.

It had a pair of horns on top of what would have been its head, and two red, glowing eyes glared at the Beagle and the cat.

The Divinations Professor, Gabriel thought, really should have seen it coming.

Something sandpapery scraped my arm.

"It's easier than you think, if the god wants to be lost."

I have no idea what that one is. I don't remember it at all.

Shit, he was dead.

Edited to: apparently you're not supposed to give any context for any of these things, so I've removed their "working titles" (if you can call them that)...
agilebrit: (KKBB manip Tony/Pepper)
Stolen from damn near everyone on my flist. Post one line from each of your WIPs. No context, no explanations. No more than one sentence!

Here we go...

"All I'm saying is that Mary getting turned into a cow is too fantastic for words, and you, my friend, are very very drunk."

NB: Oh, God, I love this story, why am I not working on it RIGHT NOW???

The voice sounded like a chipmunk would if it inhaled helium and spoke English.

It had a pair of horns on top of what would have been its head, and two red, glowing eyes glared at the Beagle and the cat.

The Divinations Professor, Gabriel thought, really should have seen it coming.

Something sandpapery scraped my arm.

"It's easier than you think, if the god wants to be lost."

I have no idea what that one is. I don't remember it at all.

Shit, he was dead.

Edited to: apparently you're not supposed to give any context for any of these things, so I've removed their "working titles" (if you can call them that)...

Oh, Ben.

Feb. 16th, 2009 01:02 pm
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
Have I said lately how much I love him?

I'm just sort of poking the thing randomly now, waiting for more feedback. I realized today that when he wakes up from this scene, he'd have visible bruises around his wrists, biceps, chest, and waist (as he is shirtless when he wakes up--yeah, I know. Shut up), and a burn mark across his throat as well. So, I added those in. And I'm reading through the scene and get to this:

Pamela stepped out into the sun. "Are you gonna go all grr and try to eat us? Because I gotta say, Ben, that what I saw in that room was all kinds o' disturbin', and I ain't sure I want my daughter dating, not to put too fine a point on it, a bloodsuckin' fiend from beyond the grave. Let alone living with one."

"Been watching Buffy reruns again?" Now Ben just looked tired. "It's not like that, okay? I ate that dude because he was one of the bad guys and he hit Janni. And, if I can put my own fine point on things, they took three pints of my blood before they decided that using me as a live dialysis machine for a vampire would be an excellent idea, so I was strung out and damned hungry when I woke up from being dead. The nanotech can't heal me without food." He leaned against the wall and crossed his arms. "Also, I'm not on the verge of a panic attack for the first time in, like, ever, and I'd like to stop and smell the roses before you break out the stakes and garlic. If that's all right."


GAWD, I love it when his sarcasm circuits are firing on all cylinders. ♥♥♥

Oh, Ben.

Feb. 16th, 2009 01:02 pm
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
Have I said lately how much I love him?

I'm just sort of poking the thing randomly now, waiting for more feedback. I realized today that when he wakes up from this scene, he'd have visible bruises around his wrists, biceps, chest, and waist (as he is shirtless when he wakes up--yeah, I know. Shut up), and a burn mark across his throat as well. So, I added those in. And I'm reading through the scene and get to this:

Pamela stepped out into the sun. "Are you gonna go all grr and try to eat us? Because I gotta say, Ben, that what I saw in that room was all kinds o' disturbin', and I ain't sure I want my daughter dating, not to put too fine a point on it, a bloodsuckin' fiend from beyond the grave. Let alone living with one."

"Been watching Buffy reruns again?" Now Ben just looked tired. "It's not like that, okay? I ate that dude because he was one of the bad guys and he hit Janni. And, if I can put my own fine point on things, they took three pints of my blood before they decided that using me as a live dialysis machine for a vampire would be an excellent idea, so I was strung out and damned hungry when I woke up from being dead. The nanotech can't heal me without food." He leaned against the wall and crossed his arms. "Also, I'm not on the verge of a panic attack for the first time in, like, ever, and I'd like to stop and smell the roses before you break out the stakes and garlic. If that's all right."


GAWD, I love it when his sarcasm circuits are firing on all cylinders. ♥♥♥
agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
I just moved a single line from one place in a paragraph to another place farther on in the paragraph so that it connects better with the last line in that paragraph.

It started like this:
They stopped, and he hung there by his bruised and bleeding wrists, limp and panting and wishing like hell he could pass out. One of them grabbed his hair and growled into his face, "Tell your bitch of a boss to back off. Or your girlfriend is next." The whip slashed across his chest once, and then backhanded across his stomach, and his wish was granted.

And now it's this:
They stopped, and one of them grabbed his hair and growled into his face, "Tell your bitch of a boss to back off. Or your girlfriend is next." Ben hung there by his bruised and bleeding wrists, limp and panting and wishing like hell he could pass out. The whip slashed across his chest once, and then backhanded across his stomach, and his wish was granted.

Yes. This is me, still tweaking the opening.

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