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Dude, I don't see any way of getting that dead body on page two or three without glossing over that whole first scene entirely--which would only get the body on page four. Page two? Is completely impossible.

Maybe I should print the thing out and take an actual red pen to it. Really, a blow-by-blow description of the fight isn't necessary. Is it?
I've already whacked out something like 750 words. ARGH. Thing is, I'd really like to get it down to under 5000, because that increases its marketability enormously. However, I also want to be true to the story I want to tell.
What a friggin' tightrope.
I'm going for a walk. *stomps off*

Maybe I should print the thing out and take an actual red pen to it. Really, a blow-by-blow description of the fight isn't necessary. Is it?
I've already whacked out something like 750 words. ARGH. Thing is, I'd really like to get it down to under 5000, because that increases its marketability enormously. However, I also want to be true to the story I want to tell.
What a friggin' tightrope.
I'm going for a walk. *stomps off*