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Nov. 24th, 2012 03:51 pmWelp. I've done an editing pass through the steampunk werewolf western.
I don't hate it. I guess that's good.
I need to get a timeframe in the first paragraph or so. That would set my scene better. I suck at setting scenes.
I'm not sure if I actually need more on my preacher's Dark Secret. It's hinted at but never really stated outright, and he's onscreen for such a short period of time that I'm not sure that what it was is all that important to the story so much as the fact that he has one and feels as if he's redeemed himself at his death.
And there's the issue of the way I use language in the thing. I'm not sure if I've gone overboard in dropping the g's from "ing" words in the narrative or not. It's first person, so it's his voice, you know? Maybe I'll take another pass through it tomorrow, or read it out loud, and see how it sounds, before I make a decision on that one.
I haven't looked at the tattoo story yet. I suppose that should be next on my plate.
I don't hate it. I guess that's good.
I need to get a timeframe in the first paragraph or so. That would set my scene better. I suck at setting scenes.
I'm not sure if I actually need more on my preacher's Dark Secret. It's hinted at but never really stated outright, and he's onscreen for such a short period of time that I'm not sure that what it was is all that important to the story so much as the fact that he has one and feels as if he's redeemed himself at his death.
And there's the issue of the way I use language in the thing. I'm not sure if I've gone overboard in dropping the g's from "ing" words in the narrative or not. It's first person, so it's his voice, you know? Maybe I'll take another pass through it tomorrow, or read it out loud, and see how it sounds, before I make a decision on that one.
I haven't looked at the tattoo story yet. I suppose that should be next on my plate.
