Yet another editing pass...

And the ellipses abuse has been curbed. Go, me.

I also wrote a flashback scene of the time that not!Harmony met not!Harry again. *squints at it* I like it better, it's a better scene and fleshes out something that's told bare-bones in dialogue...

I'm just not sure I like flashbacks.

Decisions, decisions.

ETA: You know, I think I like flashbacks more than "stories told in dialogue." So, yeah.

Yet another editing pass...

And the ellipses abuse has been curbed. Go, me.

I also wrote a flashback scene of the time that not!Harmony met not!Harry again. *squints at it* I like it better, it's a better scene and fleshes out something that's told bare-bones in dialogue...

I'm just not sure I like flashbacks.

Decisions, decisions.

ETA: You know, I think I like flashbacks more than "stories told in dialogue." So, yeah.

OH GOD.

Lo, I have become a walking frakking cliche in the writing of this.

Flashback scene, right? Not!Harmony meets not!Harry, five or so years after graduation. He's sitting there in his car amongst the wreckage of his psyche, with a gun on the passenger seat. Does she freak?

Well, yes. (probably not enough, IMO)

But what else does she do?

She hides her freakedness (not well), and asks him to go out for coffee with her.

AND THEN SHE TAKES HIM HOME WITH HER. AND THEY END UP IN BED TOGETHER. Probably just sleeping (not that I specify, and maybe I should), because he's just come thisclose to blowing his brains out and is in no damn shape for sex, but still. In bed. (Also, this is me. My characters don't put out on a first date. If you can even call this a "date" rather than an "intervention.")

Because "I went to high school with him, and he's going through a rough patch, and he's broken, which pings my nethers." Well, pings not!Harmony's nethers, anyway. I'd personally be running, screaming, in the other direction (because I have enough emotional wreckage of my own without taking on someone else's, thanks). But she's got Wilson Syndrome. She thinks she can put him back together. I guess she wants a long-term project.

But, seriously. How screwed up is that? Would any sensible person do that?

OH GOD.

Lo, I have become a walking frakking cliche in the writing of this.

Flashback scene, right? Not!Harmony meets not!Harry, five or so years after graduation. He's sitting there in his car amongst the wreckage of his psyche, with a gun on the passenger seat. Does she freak?

Well, yes. (probably not enough, IMO)

But what else does she do?

She hides her freakedness (not well), and asks him to go out for coffee with her.

AND THEN SHE TAKES HIM HOME WITH HER. AND THEY END UP IN BED TOGETHER. Probably just sleeping (not that I specify, and maybe I should), because he's just come thisclose to blowing his brains out and is in no damn shape for sex, but still. In bed. (Also, this is me. My characters don't put out on a first date. If you can even call this a "date" rather than an "intervention.")

Because "I went to high school with him, and he's going through a rough patch, and he's broken, which pings my nethers." Well, pings not!Harmony's nethers, anyway. I'd personally be running, screaming, in the other direction (because I have enough emotional wreckage of my own without taking on someone else's, thanks). But she's got Wilson Syndrome. She thinks she can put him back together. I guess she wants a long-term project.

But, seriously. How screwed up is that? Would any sensible person do that?