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You have got to be frakking kidding me...
Feb. 21st, 2009 11:07 amI realized yesterday that the scene delineating the fallout from my climax is broken.
FRELL FRAK DREN. *keysmash* asdfkaj;fasjl;fiaj *headdesk*
I'm frustrated. Can you tell I'm frustrated? Yeah. Totally.
The problem is that if not!Pepper can't talk not!Harry down from that automatic weapon under his chin, then he hasn't grown as a character. This is bad. Isn't it? Shouldn't he realize that he can live without not!Harmony? Or is it just as interesting that that he can't? Or can I make it just as interesting that he can't?
But if she is able to talk him down, then she doesn't fail, and I kind of need her to.
AND THEN I realized that I'm telling this entire scene from the wrong POV. It should be from not!Harry's POV, but it's from not!Pepper's, and this is wrong. BUT. If I swap it to his POV, I worry that I lose dramatic tension because the POV character is unlikely to off himself, so the reader will be less worried about him. ON THE OTHER HAND...I totally killed him once already in a scene that was his POV, so this concern might just be me worrying about stupid shit instead of telling the story I need to tell.
Also, if I swap POV to his, I lose the phrase "His eyes were blue pits of exhausted despair," and I really really really like that sentence.
DAMMIT. AGILEBRIT SMASH.
FRELL FRAK DREN. *keysmash* asdfkaj;fasjl;fiaj *headdesk*
I'm frustrated. Can you tell I'm frustrated? Yeah. Totally.
The problem is that if not!Pepper can't talk not!Harry down from that automatic weapon under his chin, then he hasn't grown as a character. This is bad. Isn't it? Shouldn't he realize that he can live without not!Harmony? Or is it just as interesting that that he can't? Or can I make it just as interesting that he can't?
But if she is able to talk him down, then she doesn't fail, and I kind of need her to.
AND THEN I realized that I'm telling this entire scene from the wrong POV. It should be from not!Harry's POV, but it's from not!Pepper's, and this is wrong. BUT. If I swap it to his POV, I worry that I lose dramatic tension because the POV character is unlikely to off himself, so the reader will be less worried about him. ON THE OTHER HAND...I totally killed him once already in a scene that was his POV, so this concern might just be me worrying about stupid shit instead of telling the story I need to tell.
Also, if I swap POV to his, I lose the phrase "His eyes were blue pits of exhausted despair," and I really really really like that sentence.
DAMMIT. AGILEBRIT SMASH.
