Snippet Saturday!

The lovely and effulgent difrancis (Diana Pharaoh Francis, her books are brilliant, you should totally check them out, fer serious) runs a little thing on her LJ she calls "Snippet Saturday," wherein she posts a snippet of something she's working on and invites the rest of us to do the same. Because I'm a shameless h0r, I frequently participate in this, and have done so this week.

Here's mine. Remember that remark the other day about "the most horrifying thing I'd ever written"? Yeah, that. And really, I don't know why this scene just gives me the cold shudders it does, but...yeah. Maybe it's the idea of using a human as a dialysis machine for a vampire and the fact that I have a thing about blood to begin with, so it hits my squicks just right.

Gaaaaaaaaaaaaah.

And now I should really sit down and write my requisite 250 words for the day. I need something more between the current scene and the one before it, so I can rachet up the dramatic tension a smidge before not!Tony and not!Perry go riding to the rescue.

Snippet Saturday!

The lovely and effulgent difrancis (Diana Pharaoh Francis, her books are brilliant, you should totally check them out, fer serious) runs a little thing on her LJ she calls "Snippet Saturday," wherein she posts a snippet of something she's working on and invites the rest of us to do the same. Because I'm a shameless h0r, I frequently participate in this, and have done so this week.

Here's mine. Remember that remark the other day about "the most horrifying thing I'd ever written"? Yeah, that. And really, I don't know why this scene just gives me the cold shudders it does, but...yeah. Maybe it's the idea of using a human as a dialysis machine for a vampire and the fact that I have a thing about blood to begin with, so it hits my squicks just right.

Gaaaaaaaaaaaaah.

And now I should really sit down and write my requisite 250 words for the day. I need something more between the current scene and the one before it, so I can rachet up the dramatic tension a smidge before not!Tony and not!Perry go riding to the rescue.

*smacks Muse upside the head*

You know, putting this:

Because he wasn't dead. She refused, utterly, to believe that he was.

Right before the scene where not!Harry wakes up? Is the exact opposite of "ratcheting up the tension" here.

*growls and fixes*

She hated to admit it, but she honestly thought that Janni was right. If Marilyn and Alex brought anything back...it would be a body.

Yeah, that's better.

*smacks Muse upside the head*

You know, putting this:

Because he wasn't dead. She refused, utterly, to believe that he was.

Right before the scene where not!Harry wakes up? Is the exact opposite of "ratcheting up the tension" here.

*growls and fixes*

She hated to admit it, but she honestly thought that Janni was right. If Marilyn and Alex brought anything back...it would be a body.

Yeah, that's better.