agilebrit: (Tony Stark--Anteaters)
agilebrit ([personal profile] agilebrit) wrote2009-02-12 09:01 pm

FRAK. ME.

...

And now I've decided my first paragraph sucks, y'all.

GYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH.

[identity profile] lizbeth-mairead.livejournal.com 2009-02-13 04:53 am (UTC)(link)
Hahahaha, you sound just like me.

[identity profile] agilebrit.livejournal.com 2009-02-13 04:54 am (UTC)(link)
First. Paragraph.

Which has been sitting there since July.

Mocking me, apparently.

[identity profile] lizbeth-mairead.livejournal.com 2009-02-13 04:57 am (UTC)(link)
Watch out, if given leeway they tend to jump onto your head and leech off your thoughts so it's all you can think about. It goes from mocking to stalking in a very short period of time. No brain is left safe.

[identity profile] agilebrit.livejournal.com 2009-02-13 05:00 am (UTC)(link)
I just have to keep telling myself "Show, don't tell." And that first 'graph is a fine example of "showing." Which I am now fixing.

On the plus side, more word count. Yay.

On the minus side, poor not!Harry. Now I'm showing him getting the snot beat out of him...

[identity profile] lizbeth-mairead.livejournal.com 2009-02-13 05:03 am (UTC)(link)
Ehehehe. Sometimes characters need to be on exhibit in such circumstances ;D

[identity profile] agilebrit.livejournal.com 2009-02-13 05:22 am (UTC)(link)
Well, you know, it's a pattern throughout the thing, him getting the shit kicked out of him. Might as well establish it early...