So, I did the DVD Commentary Meme (still open for playing, if anyone wants to), and ravens_gate requested a DVD commentary of a DVD extra, namely, the scene in which Ben and Janni meet again for the first time five years after they graduate from high school and go their separate ways. She goes off to college and majors in Theater and English, and he toddles off to a couple of tours in Afghanistan, where he is captured by insurgents and torture ensues. And... go.


This came about because of my innate inability to just let things go.  The original scene was about three paragraphs long, and entailed Janni describing for Megan her first meeting with Ben after he came back from Afghanistan.  I decided that was too much telling and not enough showing, and went into flashback mode instead, which turned into more like 1700 words.  And that was a fine and shiny thing--except for my aforementioned inability to let things go.  I love writing the same scene from two different points of view (see: both Iron Man stories I've written), and this one has the added bonus of being in first person, which POV I also love writing in and don't do nearly enough of.

( The rest of it is under here. )

Since I have nothing terribly urgent to write, I thought I'd work on the commentary for "Cerberus." And, lo, it is done. ( Read onward... )

Previous part here.

Chapter Two: Buffy’s Gift( Read more... )

In other news, it snowed in Utah today. *shakes fist* It's JUNE. STOP IT.

Back from Sacramento! Whew, that's a long drive. No caterpillars on the way back. *sobs*

Did this for treepretty:


And this one for wes_stillness:


( Commentary for 'Gift,' Ch1 )

Previous parts here (ch1), and here (ch2).

( click me! )

...For "A Mess of Pottage." Part One is here.

( A Mess of Pottage, Chapter Two Commentary )

Please comment if you're reading this, even just to tell me it sucks...I know three people voted for this in the poll.

Yeah, I didn't come up with anything really cool for the lost_icontest this week, so I'll post the crappy ones I came up with. *sigh* Had I been able to come up with a screencap of the Golden-Throated Small-Winged Warbler, the one would have been much funnier than it is.



And now for the commentary. I know three people are waiting for this with bated breath, so without further ado...

( clicky clicky! )