ext_11805 ([identity profile] illmantrim.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] agilebrit 2004-10-05 11:42 pm (UTC)

I like it. A lot. It flows well and seems to hold together.
One thing, maybe a mention of how the Slayers found out about the battle?
Also... possibly more reaction from Gunn. I know he is battle hardened and all but these were his friends for years here... a little more freak-outedness might be in order.

All in all though, i loved it.
Thank you.

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