ext_37904 ([identity profile] lady-moriel.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] agilebrit 2009-12-07 02:22 am (UTC)

That's kind of choppy because of all the comma-separated clauses--maybe shift it around like so?

The shadowy cord formed an intricate pattern of diamonds, knotted at the corners, in a wide-meshed net all over him.

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