FRAK. ME.

[agilebrit]

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And now I've decided my first paragraph sucks, y'all.

GYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH.

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[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

I just have to keep telling myself "Show, don't tell." And that first 'graph is a fine example of "showing." Which I am now fixing.

On the plus side, more word count. Yay.

On the minus side, poor not!Harry. Now I'm showing him getting the snot beat out of him...

[lizbeth-mairead.livejournal.com]

Ehehehe. Sometimes characters need to be on exhibit in such circumstances ;D

[agilebrit.livejournal.com]

Well, you know, it's a pattern throughout the thing, him getting the shit kicked out of him. Might as well establish it early...