Well, how big is your business card? I mean, I wouldn't want to be passing out 3 X 5 cards or anything. LOL!
Also, it might solve the confusion problem if you just say WHERE he works. I liked the "we call it SS" line, but why not just CALL it that. "I work for SS (or whatever the name was)." That would make it infinitely more interesting too. And you could probably drop a few sentences at the beginning if you start with that lead. Just a thought.
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Date: 2008-02-10 10:45 pm (UTC)Also, it might solve the confusion problem if you just say WHERE he works. I liked the "we call it SS" line, but why not just CALL it that. "I work for SS (or whatever the name was)." That would make it infinitely more interesting too. And you could probably drop a few sentences at the beginning if you start with that lead. Just a thought.